38 review for Harry Potter and the Elder Wand

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   5 out of 5

   cait – Mar 26, 2017

   This fan fiction started off well, I'll give it that much. Unfortunately, its momentum was lost very quickly. The writing was amateur. There was little to no tension in the plot. The characters were devoid of any of the personality that made us fall in love with them in the books. There was too much telling, not enough showing. And the action sequences were far too short and anticlimactic. There were quite a few situations & sentences, unfortunately, that belied a lack of understanding or recollec This fan fiction started off well, I'll give it that much. Unfortunately, its momentum was lost very quickly. The writing was amateur. There was little to no tension in the plot. The characters were devoid of any of the personality that made us fall in love with them in the books. There was too much telling, not enough showing. And the action sequences were far too short and anticlimactic. There were quite a few situations & sentences, unfortunately, that belied a lack of understanding or recollection of what had happened by the end of Deathly Hallows - Death Eaters who had been killed were alive once more, dementors were back as the guards of Azkaban, the vanishing cabinet had somehow survived the demon fire in the Room of Requirement only to transport to another room that Ginny coincidentally (& inexplicably) was using to continue DA lessons, & Aberforth referred to his brother as Dumbledore. Just to name a few. For an (I assume) very young writer, it was certainly a promising start. But experience, editing, & practice would certainly have gone a long way.

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   5 out of 5

   Shanda Strawkas – May 07, 2017

   As a Harry Potter fan, I can honestly say I enjoyed this.

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   5 out of 5

   Abby Coble –

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   5 out of 5

   Shannon –

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   4 out of 5

   Kristi Spinks – Apr 25, 2017

   This review has been hidden because it contains spoilers. To view it, click here. While the writing itself was good, there was one major flaw in the story. The story is based on the idea that vampires had not been seen in almost 200 years so nobody believed they still existed. Apparently the writer either did not read "The Half Blood Prince," only watched the movies, or just plain forgot about Sanguini, who was the vampire that had attended Slughorn's party. Harry had met the vampire. Hermione was also in attendance at the party. That in itself should tell them that vampires While the writing itself was good, there was one major flaw in the story. The story is based on the idea that vampires had not been seen in almost 200 years so nobody believed they still existed. Apparently the writer either did not read "The Half Blood Prince," only watched the movies, or just plain forgot about Sanguini, who was the vampire that had attended Slughorn's party. Harry had met the vampire. Hermione was also in attendance at the party. That in itself should tell them that vampires still existed.

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   5 out of 5

   Gabi –

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   5 out of 5

   Pat Hynes –

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   5 out of 5

   Leah – Mar 31, 2017

   Overall a good read given its fan fiction but I did notice several inaccuracies. *SPOILERS AHEAD* 1. Heromine went back to Hogwarts to finish school so she would not have tried to get a position as a teacher, although the author did attempt to address this later it is still inaccurate. 2. There is already a Bartholomew in the main HP books (Barty Crouch aka Bartholomew Crouch) so it would have been better to choose a different name. 3. Why did the author have Harry get an owl but do nothing with it? Overall a good read given its fan fiction but I did notice several inaccuracies. *SPOILERS AHEAD* 1. Heromine went back to Hogwarts to finish school so she would not have tried to get a position as a teacher, although the author did attempt to address this later it is still inaccurate. 2. There is already a Bartholomew in the main HP books (Barty Crouch aka Bartholomew Crouch) so it would have been better to choose a different name. 3. Why did the author have Harry get an owl but do nothing with it? Never mentioned the name or anything. Seemed pointless to even mention it. 4. Yes, in the movies the dragon did get lose in the Goblet if fire but in the books the castle was never damaged by the drsgon, the dragon never got loose. 5. A lot of repetitive points and some things didn't feel like things the characters would say. 6. There were several things that should have been fleshed out more like the above mentioned comment about Harry's new owl. I did enjoy the fan fiction I just wish more care had been made when adding details that JK Rowling herself mentioned and fleshing out more details to really make it feel like a Harry Potter book.

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   4 out of 5

   Leanne Jacobs –

10. 

    4 out of 5

    Derek –

11. 

    5 out of 5

    Drew.menster –

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    4 out of 5

    Hiba Quraan –

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    4 out of 5

    Tarin –

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    5 out of 5

    Miranda –

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    4 out of 5

    Onika –

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    4 out of 5

    Nithila –

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    5 out of 5

    Samantha –

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    4 out of 5

    Jithin James –

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    5 out of 5

    Jen –

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    5 out of 5

    Kanyon –

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    5 out of 5

    Lisa Kenny –

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    5 out of 5

    Su –

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    4 out of 5

    Jennifer Haslem –

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    4 out of 5

    Amamda –

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    4 out of 5

    Cassidy Allender –

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    4 out of 5

    Charese Rencher –

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    5 out of 5

    Indigo Buikema –

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    4 out of 5

    Holly Skrim –

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    5 out of 5

    Courtney –

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    4 out of 5

    amanda_the_librarian –

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    4 out of 5

    Tracy Mccart –

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    5 out of 5

    Jessica Macias –

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    5 out of 5

    Leah Lynch –

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    4 out of 5

    Lori Kircher –

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    4 out of 5

    Lisa Whitehead –

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    5 out of 5

    Karson Brennaman –

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    4 out of 5

    Dawn Nienast –

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    4 out of 5

    Paula –